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I felt my soul leave
about 7 days before I died.
I was driving up 93 and
just happened to catch it
floating out the window.


There are moments when
you just
know.
And I knew.


It was only a matter of time.
So few hours left to
say my goodbyes.
Say hellos I had been
meaning to say.


I love yous.


Only a blink of an eye
to tell the truth.
And the truth was

I hadn't really lived.

I tried, yes.
But this wasn't a
"good"
life.
It was simply a


Life.


And maybe that was enough.


Looking out the window
that day,
in that car,
it was enough.


Closed my eyes,
rolled down the windows and felt
a sudden rush of air.
A breath from someone
else's screams.


Wake Up.


7 days left to finally
open these eyes.
Finally feel,


just
feel.


A week to make these
30 years worth
something.
And then


Relief.


The end of a life.


My life.


It took me 30 years
to finally figure out that
it could happen



to me.
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:faint: This is like realizing it's time to be (gasp!) a grown up. But I feel like there's more to this than just that. Like...realizing our own mortality. And how things can't just be taken for granted anymore. And how there's this whole life we could be living outside of ourselves, but time is shrinking. I think that's what it really means to me-- time's running out and at the same time, realizing there's this whole world we could be living and it's either now or never. :shrug:

Anywayyy....I dig this. The format, and how it kind of falls from one partial thought to another, lends itself well to the topic. Nicely done, you. :clap:
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012
Yeesh, your comments are better than my poetry! Thanks so much for taking the time to comment the way you do.
And yes, coming to terms with your mortality on the highway is quite jarring ha.
"saosin" is actually a band that sings the song "7years". You should YouTube it. :heart:
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I actually googled that last night and found that song. I definitely dig it.

I always appreciate when someone digs into a piece enough to be able to say something more than "I like it" so I try to do the same thing. And I'm surprised my comments made any sense. I think I was getting pretty sleepy by that point. I stay up way too late.
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IgnitionInStars Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This poem is going to make watching you absolutely worth it. :heart: this has so much meaning to me, but in a completely different way. To me it's explains how someone can teach you to live.
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2012
I can't tell u how much this means to me. Comments like this is why I came back to dA. Thank you SO much :heart:
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IgnitionInStars Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I mean every single word. :heart:
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riparii Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2012
Compelling and vivid, the first five lines especially, are so, so evocative.
The title is intriguing, and gives an extra layer to the poem.

The death of immortality?
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012
The title is the name of a band that sings a song called "7 years". I guess I kind of stole it. :D

I don't much care for this piece. I feel like I've been in a slump the last few months, years. I'm working on it, though. :)

Yes, that is exactly right. The moment you realize that someday you too will be nothing but a memory. We go through our first 25 years or so thinking we are invincible. Took me 31 to to find my own mortality.

Thank you again for all the comments. It means so much to me. :heart: :hug:
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riparii Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012
It's a cool word, saosin, I had to Google it of course,
and wasn't disappointed.
It's tough, I'm old enough to spend more time than is
at all comfortable, contemplating age and mortality.
We need a better cultural narrative. We need elders
in the archaic sense of the word, so that advancing
years beckon instead of loom like a bad storm.

Happy to, and thanks to you as well, a pleasure to
read your comments and ideas.
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012
I wholeheartedly agree with you. I take care of the elderly for a living and I can say, I have learned more doing this in the last 2 years than I have learned in any classroom. I also notice a few of the women I work with tend to treat the clients as children, I choose to treat them as friends. My seems to be working out better ;p
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riparii Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012
I would think your clients love you for it.
Dignity seems too often to be a precious rare
commodity in old age.
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handswouldweave Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012   Writer
Maybe that's enough.

But I love how the fractured structure of the poem gives pause that thought- like the speaker knows that NO. It ISN'T enough, no matter how many times that he/she may say aloud that it is.

Such wonderful, skillful use of structure, which is something I find increasingly rare these days. So many people seem to use structure to just be artsy and it doesn't achieve anything, but it adds such a powerful poignance to this piece.
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2012
Thank you so much for commenting. It always means a lot to come here and find that someone has taken the time to read something I've written. Not just read it, but really take it in. :) I'm blabbing, ha. It's just nice! So thank you! :heart:
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anoddchild Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2011  Student General Artist
*speechless*

this hits me like a suckerpunch wrapped in the softest down.
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2011
I think your comment topped my writing, ha. Thank you :heart:
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vampsss Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2011  Professional Digital Artist
I love it, it's like a lyrics. I would like to compose some kind of music for your words.
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2012
Well, Alex, you have my permission to do so.
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Zaphod-Beeblebrox58 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2011
Damn...just damn

I could say more

but I'll just leave it at "damn"
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2011
I will take damn.
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Zaphod-Beeblebrox58 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2011
I knew that you would...:)
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sixtyseventy Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2011
I don't know how you write things and I believe them, even if they're clearly fiction.
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2011
I absolutely love when you read my crap, Val. It makes me truly happy. <---nonfiction
:heart:
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ShiKi-RynN Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2011  Professional Traditional Artist
Interesting. I like this. :)
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2011
Thank you, Miss :) :heart:
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