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I'm in this place again
Pacing back and forth
Just waiting for you to see me.
And I know it's just a matter of time.
A moment or two before the yellow
in your eyes pierces right through me.
And I fall
Again.

Packing up.
A place for everything.
This ring, that ring.
My heart and yours.
There's a place for everything,
you say.

Train's leaving in an hour.
Tracks pulling me to a place I've never been.
Never wanted to go.
But I know it's over.
Nothing here for me.
No more air for me to breathe.

It's not the destination,
it's the journey,
you say.
But I know you.
You're a wonderful liar.
My wonderful sinner.
Every strand of hair is a lie.

Wave to me this morning with your eyes closed.
Better to see me with.
But only this morning.
A deep breath in,
a sigh of relief,
disgust,
hate,
love.

I will see you again.
Keeps pulling me back in.
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anoddchild Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2012  Student General Artist
Goddamn, girl. Love this. Like :pardonM3: , i too was caught by the same line. Faking with dye to preserve a "look"..... this is excellent, bebe....
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012
=)))))))


Thank you so much, really. And again, it's SO good to hear from you!! :hug:
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pardonM3 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012
This is what caught me:

Every strand of hair is a lie.

It sounds like some old saying or proverb. And it's so physical and earthly and binding.

And the short phrases throughout -- esp. those cut by periods -- give the impression that the speaker is taking shallow breaths - there is literally no more air left to breathe.
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012
I wish I could say I used the punctuation purposely but I didn't. The truth is, I don't know much about writing. I just know I feel a lot better when I am writing often. Whether is sucks or not. :) so thank you very much for not thinking this sucks. :heart:
And thank you for taking the time to leave such a great comment. :heart:
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caybeach Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Brilliant writing as always :heart:
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012
Thank you :):):):) :heart:
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caybeach Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
It's my pleasure :) :heart:
And thank you very much for the watch :hug:
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frazzled-mage Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2011
You do a magnificent job in this piece of taking me with you. Well written. And nice to hear from you again.
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2011
Thank you :heart:
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