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I'm listening to ice melt. It's funny sometimes, the things you notice when you're alone. The things you hear in the silence. The things we see in the dark. So I listen to the sound of the ice. It's the most beautiful thing I've ever heard. Cracking, dripping, wasting away.  Am I fighting my sanity? Am a living in a dream? Nothing seems real anymore. In this silence. The ice is still ice but I don't feel like myself. I'm flying maybe, maybe hovering. I see myself in the puddle below. Soft touched and looking back at myself. A looking glass of water. Am I Alice? I run my fingers over the puddle and suddenly I'm a Picasso, a masterpiece. A work of art only to be seen in the dark. I am giving way like the hardened water. Drops of me gone, a little more every day. Drink of me what you will and in the Winter I will be myself again. Sane and wide awake.
I like to think this is all a dream.
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shimmytwist Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014
love it Heart I think I've fainted. 
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014
Ha, good, I'm glad. Thanks so much for commenting. Nice to hear from you again :) <3
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shimmytwist Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014
Hug Heart 
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014
:heart::hug::heart:
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I read this pretty often. Sometimes it speaks to me more than other times. I'm convinced it's based on my mood. But every time, I'm still in awe of how you use your words: Soft touched. A Picasso. Drops of you gone, a little more every day. Are you Alice? Every time I'm jealous I can't write like that.

This piece seems to affect me a it more lately.
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014
I don't recall seeing this comment before. You Can write like this, you Do write like this. Don't be jealous of me. <3
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You just have a way with words, and it's in everything, not just your writing. I just think you express yourself so much better than I can. I've always been envious of that, right from the start. 
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TheseKrimzonFlames Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Each time I see this, I am more and more convinced that these are among the most amazing words I've ever read.
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:iconflermigan:
Flermigan Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012
Oh my gosh, thank you so much. I have to say, I love random comments on this from you! Ha :hug:
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TheseKrimzonFlames Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2012  Professional Writer
Hehe!:D :glomp:
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like this lots. I can picture sitting alone with nothing more than my thoughts and a glass of ice water. And it actually gives me goosebumps. Not from the ice, but from the pent up feelings this awakens. It's heaviness is definitely felt. :heart:
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012
:heart:
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Effamay Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012
I faved this a long time ago and stumbled across it again today... lost myself in it all over again :heart:
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012
Geez, this made me happy. :)

I'm glad you stumbled upon it. I've been gone for a long time. Happy to hear from you :heart:
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pardonM3 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012
and suddenly I'm a Picasso, a masterpiece. A work of art only to be seen in the dark. I am giving way like the hardened water.
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:iconflermigan:
Flermigan Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012
:) :heart:
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:iconthesekrimzonflames:
TheseKrimzonFlames Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2011  Professional Writer
I still love to come read this, I do at least once a week. :heart:
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:iconflermigan:
Flermigan Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2011
You are too sweet. :) :hug:
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TheseKrimzonFlames Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2011  Professional Writer
:aww: :glomp:
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Zephyrus-Wind Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2010   Traditional Artist
This is great, the whole thing is really alive with your imagery.
I adore it.
The Alice thing was a Carrol allusion, no?
Nice touch.
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:iconflermigan:
Flermigan Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2010
Yessssss it was. Alice in Wonderland is my favorite book and character.

Thank you, love. :heart:
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Zephyrus-Wind Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2010   Traditional Artist
Beautiful allusion.

No problem.
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Aborro Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
holy moley, that made so much sense
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:iconflermigan:
Flermigan Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009
:heart:
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TheseKrimzonFlames Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Professional Writer
Again, i thought I had this in my favs. :XD: :slow:
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raven-gc Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
wonderful<3
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2009
Thank you very much. :heart:
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raven-gc Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
you're very welcome.

it really made my day when i read it
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Pickled-Poppy Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2009  Student Writer
Golly and wowza this is really smashing. I adore the opening it's just billo.
the writing flows along so nicely. It's cracking.
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2009
thank you :heart:
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Lindzgal Featured By Owner May 26, 2009   Writer
You write beautifully and from the heart!
Its so refreshing!
Linda
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:iconflermigan:
Flermigan Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
Thank you so much, I truly appreciate it. :heart: :hug:
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ElyaThorn Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2009   Artist
Wow, this is so beautiful and dreamy, very contemplative and philosophical. I love it!
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2009
:) Hey, thanks so much. I am happy I found you here. :) :heart:
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ElyaThorn Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2009   Artist
Oh yes, I am very happy that I found you too!
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2009
:heart:
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kepturephotography Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2008
"I run my fingers over the puddle and suddenly I'm a Picasso, a masterpiece."

love that line.
the mentioning of ice really adds to the feel of being alone and darkness, idk why but it does.

great job! :)
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2008
thank you so much :) and thank you very much for the favorite. :heart:
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kepturephotography Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2008
you are MOST welcome :)
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SaccharineDaffodils Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2008
so pretty, so pretty
i like it very much
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2008
i'm glad, thank you :heart: :hug:
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swoon-89 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2008  Professional Writer
wow really deep... absolutely amazing and inspiring :D
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2008
thank you very much :heart:
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swoon-89 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2008  Professional Writer
You're welcome
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Effamay Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2008
Wow.

well, you know how to stun me. so much so that I'm going to feature this in a journal (so long as you don't mind:))

:heart:
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2008
:faint: of course i don't mind, i'd be so flattered :heart: thank you very much!! :hug: :hug: :hug:
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Effamay Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2008
that's what I like to hear :D

you're very welcome.

:heart:
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kingdomoflove Featured By Owner May 31, 2008
It's absolutely beautiful. Wonderful. <3
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:iconflermigan:
Flermigan Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2008
thank you so much, love :heart:
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TheseKrimzonFlames Featured By Owner May 7, 2008  Professional Writer
man, i coulda sworn i already added this....btw, i gave you ur own lil collection in my favs!! hehe:love:
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