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And she's pretty,
My God is she pretty.
But she lacks that,
sort of,
Appeal.

And her breath is almost,
Melodic.
But she doesn't have a song.
No, no sort of,
Hook.

And those fingers, so soft,
like 5, long whisps of silk
But they lack any pattern.
There's no,
sort of,
Fabric.

Yet she charms me,
she has that,
sort of,
Charisma,
That just holds you
close.

She is flawed and she is
just, sort of,
Perfect,
for me.
not much...
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AddiKay Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2011  Student Photographer
I love this, my best friend JT (he's gay.. its necessary to know this to understand what I'm about to say) he was complaining that girls have hooks and they can forever get under someone's skin. And permenantly alter them. He said "I'm jealous, I wish I could do that! or some guy could make me feel like that" and this just put what he was saying into perfect words.
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2011
Ha, he is so right. They certainly have a way of creeping into your mind as staying there...for as long as They want!
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anoddchild Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2010  Student General Artist
cute
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frazzled-mage Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2010
Great to see you again here! I enjoyed this. There is something in the supposed 'flaws' that holds appeal as well.
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neswanjeh Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2010
you speak my mind here ..... i admire how you wrote in detail about some of the things people hardly notice .... fingers for example ...

good to hear from you again .... its been a while :-)
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Deranged-Darling Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2010  Student Writer
Psshaw, its wonderful.
Kiss kiss.
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maimtorturekill Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2010
aw, you wrote.

:heart:
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2010
I wrote.
Mhmm.
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maimtorturekill Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2010
it's good.
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2010
:heart:
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maimtorturekill Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2010
:kiss:
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Zaphod-Beeblebrox58 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2010
it makes me wish I knew her, too
nice touch
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leebeeloves Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
this is beautiful!
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2010
:) Thanks a lot. :heart:
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Zephyrus-Wind Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2010   Traditional Artist
very much.
The halting rhythm you established wit the abrupt commas really brings it to life and gives it its own pulse.
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2010
Glad you found the rhythm, without it maybe then it's not much, ha.
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Zephyrus-Wind Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2010   Traditional Artist
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You're such a clever poet.
I'll give you an arm for a few ounces of talent?
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2010
Ha, you can keep the arm, I have 2 already and I need all the so-called "talent" I can get!
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Zephyrus-Wind Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2010   Traditional Artist
... but...
But arms come in handy!
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BarflyDance Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2010  Professional Photographer
very much
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2010
<3
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sixtyseventy Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2010
Not much? I love it.
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Flermigan Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2010
Thank you, Val. <3
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